First chapter of Phleas (sample)

Hi,I'm Jay.This is a written 'script' you could say of a comic I'm working on.Since I earlier found I can't draw for crap,I'd like to give a sample to you fellow deviants in order to get some volunteer artists.The comic,in my head at least,is similar to Bittersweet Candy Bowl
www.bittersweetcandybowl.com/c…
Here's a sample of the script:

(John laying on the grass in a park)
John:*Sigh* Perfect day!
(Tom walks over)
Tom:Hey!Forgetting something?
(John sits up and looks)
John: Oh,hey Tom…um…what am I forgetting?
(Tom crosses his arms and raises one eyebrow)
Tom:What day is it?
John:*pause*….um……*shocked look*CRAAAP!
(Flip to Sabrina’s house,John walks up to her)
John:Hey Sabrina,happy birthday!
(Smiles)
Sabrina*pause*…*blush*..*glare*
John:Ahah…eheh…I’m in trouble aren’t I?
(Eric sneaks up behind Sabrina and gropes her butt)
Eric:Hey babe,happy birthday.
Sabrina:Yeek!*unimpressed look at Eric*
Eric:Aww,c’mon,lighten up.It’s your birthday!
Tom:Hey,happy b day Sab!
Sabrina:Thanks Tom………thank you John.
Eric:What about me babe?
Sabrina:You grabbed,my ass.
Eric:What?It was part one of your birthday gift,and part two is even better.*winks and puts hands on her hips*
Sabrina:You forgot the birthday ‘bashes’.
Eric:What!?I’m not gonna hit a girl like you,even if it is your birthday.
Sabrina:No,I meant yours *bops him on the nose*
Eric:*nose bleeding*Hahaah,that’s my girl,playing hard to get.
John:Hahaha,well we better get going or we’ll be late for school.
Sabrina:Alright,see ya boys.

I'll submit a description of the characters in a later journal entry.